Mirror+writing


 * __Wednesday 8th April__ **

The Teenager looking at me looks familiar. He has different coloured eyes, his green and brown eyes are very strange looking they look like the colours of the bush. His brown, thick hair is quite long, with curls at the back.With dried cracked lips like in the hot desserts. His slightly tanned skin with ugly looking freckles make him look strange. His little chin sticks out like an mini bum.

He was born as a Kiwi or a New Zealander on 1996, 1st of March, in Hamilton Hospital. He has a funny nature, he likes to play sports like, Soccer, Rugby, Tennis and heaps more.

His clearest memory was when in __//Queen’s town//__ and he was going to go for a quick swim in the ice cold water for a ten dollar bet, from His dad, which he couldn’t resist. He ran and jumped in off the old __//slimy//__ wharf. The ice cold water made him go into shock! He tried to climb out after a __//few seconds, panicing and the few unusual words he said when he jumped in (Does that sound right?)//__//!// He will never do anything that stupid again for ten dollars again!

__//His goals for the future are to get do really well at High School (Does that sound right?)//__ and maybe go to a university or Wintec. He wants to have a fun job he enjoys and get really good money for it, he wants to own a Harvey Davison!

__//Miss Crawford - A great effort, Aidan. You have used some effective similes to describe how you look. There are a few spelling errors that need to be changed, I have underlined those. There are a few sentences that don't quite make sense. You need to get in the habit of proof reading your work by reading out loud so you can hear if they sound right.//__


 * __Wednesday 8th April__ **

The Teenager looking at me looks familiar. He has different coloured eyes, his green and brown eyes are very strange looking they look like the colours of the bush. His brown, thick hair is quite long, with curls at the back.With dried cracked lips like in the hot desserts. His slightly tanned skin with ugly looking freckles make him look strange. His little chin sticks out like an mini bum.

He was born as a Kiwi or a New Zealander on 1996, 1st of March, in Hamilton Hospital. He has a funny nature, he likes to play sports like, Soccer, Rugby, Tennis and heaps more.

His clearest memory was when in Queens town and he was going to go for a quick swim in the ice cold water for a ten dollar bet, from His dad, which he couldn’t resist. He ran and jumped in off the old slimmy wharf. The ice cold water made him go into shock! He tried to climb out after a few seconds panicing, and the few unusual words he said when he jumped in! He will never do anything that stupid again for ten dollars again!

His goals for the future are to get do really well at High School and get good marks and then maybe go to a university or Wintec. He wants to have a fun job he enjoys and get really good money for it, he wants to own a Harvey Davison!

By: Aidan R